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Topic: Do You Like This Poem? It's called " Affliction On The Sinner "
Affliction On the Sinner...
Oh damned soul, why have you betrayed thyself? You have let your own fate perish in the depths of the Lake Of Fire... For this, you will never know the joys of heaven. Worthless fool, do you know what you have done to yourself?
The demon of Vanity has possessed you... You cannot escape its demented mind... Do not weep my prisoner, you always knew it would come to this... You know I'm right... Your life was never swell, you have always felt one's fear.
Forever are you are you in debt to His priceless oppertounities. Forever are you also to walk the Alley of Damnnation...
Jan 21
5:50 PM

Posted by zetsumei 

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i made this poem just to let u guys know...
Jan 21
6:02 PM

Posted by zetsumei 

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not so negative as i expected-see the mispells and i think you wnated to say Valley of Damnation instead of alley. Don't try to be shakespeare write what you want
Jan 27
11:18 AM


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zetsumei ,your poem is very descriptive. In essence its nice but as you must have noticed with poetry. No poem has ever been perfectly completed so you can improve on this one also . Pls help me checkout the poem i posted.
Feb 10
8:21 AM

Posted by oche Itodo

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